Hi,

Hi,

I was wondering if any Rise fans could beta read this Leosagi fic. It’s short and incomplete, but I’m working on rewriting it soon. The purpose for me asking for a beta-reader is to see how I can improve on my writing based on narrative, grammar, or any issues that stand out. I would like good and bad feedback so I am sure on what I need to improve and what I am at least pretty good at.

I’m going to put the story link in the comments since Tumblr wont allow me to add it to the post.

Thank you!

Thoughts on Time Skip in Rise Movie

Recently, it was revealed that the Rise movie takes place two years after the finale. I don’t have a full opinion until the movie is available but so far I don’t like the time skip. I was really hoping the movie would take place a few months later so we can see how Cassandra is getting along with the group, Draxum’s growing relationship with Splinter and the Turtles, and the Turtles handling their new power up. I’m nervous that the time jump will skip over that development. That’s what I was most hoping for from the movie.

I’m still excited for the movie and hope the time skip has a purpose.

Content OH Characters Would Make As Youtubers or Social Media Influencers 

Luz Noceda: Boiling Isles Vlogs & TV/Movie/Book Reviews 

Amity Blight: Building(Inventions) Videos & Occasional Advice Videos for Kids with A**sive Parents 

Willow Park: (First Time) Trying Human World Sports & Educational Plant Videos(What They Are & How to Care for Them) 

Gus Porter: Human World Vlogs & (First Time) Trying Human Stuff (Food, Events, etc)

Hunter: Carving Videos(Palismen, Objects, Statues) 

Eda Clawthorne: Posts whatever and whenever she wants 

King Clawthorne: Supernatural(visiting haunted places) Videos, Solving Unsolved Mystery Videos, & Video Game Playthroughs 

Hooty: Bug Reviews(Rating How Delicious They Are)

*Subscribers theorize whether he’s an animatronic/puppet. A lot of curse memes are made*

Lilith Clawthorne: Architectural, Facts About the Boiling Isles, & Learning Human History Videos

Raine Whispers: Music Reaction/Reviews & Vocal Coach Videos 

Camila Noceda: How To Care For Your Pet & Advice for Parents with LGBTQ+ Children (ft Luz) Videos

Vee Noceda: Cosplay & Makeup Videos 

Alador Blight: Engineering & Human Invention Reviews(+ How to Improve Them) ft Amity, Emira & Edric

Darius Deamonne: Fashion Review & Sewing Videos

Emira Blight: Prank w/ Edric & Makeup Videos

Edric Blight: Prank w/ Emira & Human World Animal Reaction(Watching funny, cute videos & helping Camila at the Vet) 

The Collector: Traveling Videos & Video Game Playthroughs w/ King 

Mattholomule: Construction & Illusion Prank w/ Gus Videos 

Masha: Scary Story Reaction & True Crime Videos 

How I Would Write Jason in TOA?

Sorry if any of this feels disjointed. This is my first time doing a character and plot rewrite.

I think Jason had loads of potential to be a great character, but it was messed up in TBM. 

If you want more details, I wrote a post about my thoughts: https://www.tumblr.com/criminalmutantsins/698742446518091776/jason-grace-deserved-better-this-is-just-my?source=share

To add on to the post, I’ll explain what I would change. 

Jason and Piper are together in TBM, but there would be dialogue explaining how it was tough “starting over” their relationship(like Blood of Olympus very much hinted) and that they had to do individual soul searching before building a better foundation for their relationship. Piper would have doubts about their relationship and still question if Aphrodite and Hera’s interference is why they are together.

Piper’s father would still lose his money but earlier, so Piper would move back to Oklahoma. Jason would go back and forth between Camp Half-Blood, building plans for the shrines. They still communicate except as friends. This would give them time to individuate and learn more about themselves(they would be broken up). Piper would realize her bisexuality and become attracted to Shel. They date, but it only last for a few months because Piper still has feelings for Jason. Her doubts of the relationship are resolved; however, she waits so she doesn’t pressure Jason. Speaking of Jason, after working for months on the shrines, he wishes to take a break and start acting/doing things for himself(hang out with friends, relaxing, etc). Jason’s feelings for Piper are still the same and, after a while, he talks to her about it. They get back together with Jason going to Oklahoma to be closer to Piper and try living a regular life. This could be good representation on how relationships take a lot of work and time, but can be worth it when there is love and communication. 

By the time The Burning Maze starts, Jason and Piper have been together for a month and are a stronger team. However, Jason is having trouble adjusting to having a normal because of his sense of responsibility to be a leader and protector. Between the couple getting together and TBM, they find another entrance to the Labyrinth and Jason learns about the prophecy. Safe to say, he is really stressed.

Instead of the prophecy saying that either Jason or Piper would die, I would change it to either one having to make a great sacrifice. Jason would still fight Caligula. It would be monumental for Jason’s character, and a big fight. Jason would lose, though he would escape with the group with grievous injuries and would be out of commission for the rest of the book. These injuries would result in Jason being paralyzed from the waist down, sacrificing a big part of his identity- being a strong fighter, something he is mostly known for. Jason would have to learn to adjust to the change and further learn more about himself. Though, thanks to Leo’s skills and a battle-ready wheelchair, Jason can still fight, he decides to mostly stay in the sidelines and be a tactician.

My Top 5 Owl House Ships(Most to Least Fav)

My rankings:

Lumity:

Their relationship development was amazingly written- one of the best enemies to lovers stories. Seeing Lumity support one another and grow individually is so sweet. My favorite moment is their kiss in the S2 finale because it cemented how serious the relationship is and it was the first LGBTQ+ kiss on Disney, which is momentous in representation.

2. Huntlow:

I shipped as soon as they met each other. Willow and Hunter are such great support systems to each other- Willow helped Hunter grow as a person and Hunter sees Willow for the amazing person she is. My favorite moment with them was Hunter comforting Willow in “For the Future” because we see how much mutual care they have for each other.

3. Raeda:

Raine and Eda are so sweet together and a great team. I immediately fell in love with their dynamic and banter in Raine’s debut episode. My favorite moments are when they make music together and Raine protecting Eda from the draining spell.

4. Aladarius:

I most likely ship Aladarius because of my headcanon and the potential they have being a couple. I headcanon that Darius had a crush on Alador since their time in Hexside and was heartbroken when Alador and Odalia got married. I think Darius can bring out Alador’s confidence and self-esteem. Alador and Darius would make a really good couple.

5. Gustholomule:

I never cared for this ship until I saw fanart and rewatched scenes with them together which made me see the appeal. Their dynamic is fun so I think it can translate well to romance. I’m fine with them either being a couple or friends.

What Are Your Fav to Least Fav Chainsaw Man Endings?

Disclaimer: I think every ending ranges from good to masterpiece. I’m basing my ranks on how much I like the song and visuals. 

12. Ending 7; “All Kinds of Kisses” by ano

This song is not for me. When it comes to songs with high-pitched singing, I mostly don’t like it. It’s a bit too cutesy and usually stay the same throughout the whole thing. I think the singer is talented but I don’t think her music is for me. There are moments when I like the song such as near the end. The song’s beat is good and I can jam to it. 

The old video game concept was a nice idea and it was fun seeing Chainsaw Denji walking around like an NPC and interacting with other characters. The visuals afterwards are okay. I don’t have strong feelings seeing the female characters is provocative positions so I can take it or leave it. The vomiting scene on the other hand made me uncomfortable. It’s not as bad as in the show but vomiting makes me really uncomfortable even when it’s censored. 

11. Ending 12; “Fight Song” by Eve 

I think my expectations with Eve kind of messed with my enjoyment of the song. With Eve doing the 1st opening for Jujutsu Kaisen, I expected a lot from Eve and, unfortunately, I was underwhelmed. The song is good and I would listen to it once in a while, yet “Fight Song” sounds more generic compared to the uniqueness of most endings. The vocals and instruments are still good. 

Visuals are sweet since we needed a chill ending with the main cast hanging out. Although the visuals are kind of like every anime ending, I appreciate the concept of a fun time. I would say my favorite part is seeing how the main three grew into a family after a rocky start in the beginning of the show. 

10. Ending 4; “Tablet” by Tooboe 

The song fits Power’s chaotic energy very well, but it’s not a song I really like without the show connection. The screaming sections are really unique and cool to listen to. However, in my opinion, the song isn’t as successful with not having an interesting bridge as “Rendevous” by Kanaria. It’s still a fun song and I do have urges to listen to it once in a while.

Seeing Power in different outfits was cute, and the costumes are pretty stylish, but that’s the only thing I really enjoy about the visuals. I don’t care for anime dances so Power dancing didn’t do much for me, and the simplicity of what’s occurring is kind of boring. Though, I really like the sketching style was a cool idea. 

9. Ending 11; “Violence” by Queen Bee

This song is a fun listen! Queen Bee have a unique vocalist who makes the song for me. The guitar is really good but it’s not particularly unique like most Chainsaw Man endings. It’s a bit poppy but I think it fits since it has some rock elements in the vocals and guitar. 

The visuals are cool. I really like the characters dissolving to add an interesting transition for the next scene. The glass fragments are nice to look at and adds something interesting to the skyline. Though, I don’t like the Power dancing part since the 3D looked a bit off but I think my bias on 2D animation is getting in the way. 

8. Ending 5; “In the Backroom” by Syudou 

It took me a while for me to like this song, probably because the beat felt a bit random at some points and I have trouble liking songs that don’t have a recognizable beat. Though, the vocals were great, especially when he did that half scream and started showing more of their vocal talent. I grew to really like the beat and interesting additions like the similar snapping and bell noises. 

Visuals were a bit too random and it’s hard to feel attachment to them since I didn’t understand the concept idea for it. They are still great though. My favorite moments were the agents walking continuous stairs, the two Makimas looking like a god, and the ending where every characters appears but ends with Denji. 

7.  Ending 10; “Dogland” by People 1 

This song is nice but I don’t get excited about it  until the bridge when the vocalist is letting loose. The ending cares “Dogland” for me. I do like the part when Denji says “Bow Wow” because of his comparison to a dog. 

The visuals and meaning behind the ending carries its ranking. Throughout the show, Denji is constantly compared to a dog and having an opening dedicated to that was a smart idea. Animating Denji with real objects filmed through rotoscope was super cool and looked natural. MAPPA did a great job as always! I also have a bias towards dogs.  

6. Ending 6; “Rendevous” by Kanaria 

The song is really good though it’s not as high since the song stays at the same level throughout the whole ending. The vocalist has a recognizable voice and the music composition is so well done that you can’t help but tap your feet to the beat. 

Labyrinths always interested me so I really enjoyed the visuals and constant looping through it. When it comes to visuals, I like feeling like I’m traveling through the setting and this opening did a great job doing it. The close up to Denji’s chainsaw form was so cool and the touch of red made it pop. 

5. Ending 2; “Time Left” by Zutomayo 

The bass at the beginning is a nice touch to the softer vocals so the song doesn’t deviate too far from Chainsaw Man’s edgy theme. My favorite parts is the bridge since the vocals and instruments ramp up and the ending when the vocalists heightens her voice in some parts(Sorry don’t know singing terms). 

I really like the sketching style of the visuals. It feels like I’m watching a manga come to life. Seeing the main cast in individual moments was nice since we get to see how different their lives are from each other. My favorite visual is Denji falling from the sky. It’s so smooth and seeing his pov made me feel like I was falling. 

4. Ending 1; “Chainsaw Blood” by Vaundy 

This is a great start to the ending fest!

I don’t have a lot to say about this song other than I enjoy the bada** feeling it gives when I listen to it and the slow “oooh, oooh” moments are a good ramp up to the song. Great song for people who like softer rock, which I usually prefer.

Visuals are really good. My favorite parts are seeing Denji rip apart the zombies during the bridge and the Denji/Pochita moments since they remind me of me and my dog. 

3. Ending 3; “Hawatari Nioku Centi” by Maximum the Hormone

I’m not a big rock fan yet I really enjoy this opening. I feel like such a bada** whenever I hear the beginning- my favorite part- and the switch up with the slow moment was so well-done. The ending with the guy revving up his voice like a chainsaw was a great touch. It’s not higher-up because I don’t love the middle section of the ending compared to the beginning and ending. Super chaotic moments aren’t my cup of tea. 

Love the red lighting and neon coloring! It makes everything pop; I would have them as a poster for my room. I also really like the choice of having Makima looking like a benevolent goddess since that’s how Denji views her. 

2. Ending 9; “Deep Down” by Aimer

This song is so different from all the others, but it works so well. Aimer has such a hauntingly beautiful voice and the softness of the instruments are welcoming after almost every ending are loud and pack a punch. 

The visuals are also simplistic with a black background with blood and organs morphing into different images. This ending made me appreciate the animation more since I see the imagery slowing changing. It’s so satisfying. 

1. Ending 8; “First Death” by T.K. from Ling tosite sigure

I love this song! T.K is one of my favorite artists! He has such a unique voice and hearing his voice mix well with more rock influenced music. I’m used to listening to his more slower music so I was pleasantly surprised that “First Death wasn’t like this. 

The visuals aren’t super unique like most other endings but the lighting is breathtaking and the more action packed moments near the end make it up for me. I’m also more partial towards Aki and Himeno since I really like their characters.